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托福写作丨“为了更快的适应大学生活,你选择辅导还是向学长求助?”
2018-06-11

There are two ways to quickly get used to the university environment for newcomers. Students can participate in the one week orientation program, or they can ask senior students for help. Which one do you prefer?


一周一次的托福范文讲解了!今天开始,我想特别地强调一下英语里写作框架的重要性,所以,若观众里有“淹没于”中式思维中而“不知所措”同学们,你们就走运了。接下来的六次投稿中,我每次都会列举一种不同的写作框架。每一种框架都代表着一种整理信息的方式,而有逻辑性的文章则是考官最看好的。若是同学们能有意识地去运用这些框架,那么至少我能保证你们不会卡壳,思路也更加清晰。



题目分析

刚进大学,最重要的就是要了解自己即将要呆四年地方。虽然小编既参加了orientation,又有一些高年级的学长们带路,但我也思考过,到底哪种方式更加有效率呢?

思路分析

对小编来讲,新生介绍可以让我更快地了解大学的各种功能,同时学校也能提供很多以后说不定能派上用场的信息。向学姐学长请教可以了解一些学校官方考虑不的事情,从而能更加深刻地了解这个学校。就个人而言,我倾向与前者的观点,因为刚到大学,最重要的还是得搞清楚“我是谁,我在什么地方”而非“这地方怎么样”。

框架:讨论(套路)型,即通过对信息的排版来达到偏向某一方的目的

介绍段

1. 用题外内容引出问题

2. 表达自己的观点,要具有偏向性,避免折中的观点

主体段#1

1. 表达对立面的观点

2. 举例表明对立面观点(具体证据,亲生经历,等)

3. 对例子进行解释(跟观点的联系?有什么重要性?)

4. 若感觉字数不够,重复23步骤

主体段#2

1. 反驳对立面的观点,并引出我方观点

2. 举例表明为何反对对立面观点,或举例表明我方观点(同上)

3. 对例子进行解释(同上)

4. 若感觉字数不够,重复23步骤

主体段#3

1. 表达我方观点

2. 举例表明我方观点

3. 对例子进行解释

3. 若感觉字数不够,重复23步骤

总结段

1. 总结三个主体段的观点

2. 延伸话题,结尾

范文+讲解

In most cases, newcomers can participate in the university’s introductory program while getting help from their fellow senior students. However, after analyzing the merits of both, I would preferto engage inorientation programs rather than asking for help. This isbecauseIbelieve official programs can help new students to adapt better.

                                          

题外话:大多数的情况下,新生既能参加学校组织的活动,又能得到学长学姐的支持。

观点:但是论效果,我觉得还是orientation programs 更加的符合大学生的需求。

To begin with, senior students are experts on their university. They are able to provide certain perspectives that are inaccessible through participating in orientation programs alone. For instance, when discussing about food in school café, senior students are able to provide detailed knowledge on which food is bad or good. Furthermore, seniors can provide useful suggestions on course selections based on students’ individual preference. This will potentially save them a lot of trouble from going through courses that they don’t like. Such specific information is simply unobtainablethrough school media.

论点:学长学姐们有很多宝贵的经验

例子:他们可以告诉新生食堂那些东西好吃不好吃,可以给新生选课的建议

解释:可以为新生们节省时间

It is true that seniors have more experiences in the university, butthere are some disadvantages when you rely too much onthem. Firstly, their opinions are shaped by their unique experiences in the university, thus it may be misleading for newcomers who still have lots to learn. Secondly, even senior students do not have a full understanding on all the functions of the university. This is a natural result from the intensive studies that prevent them from knowing everything about the place. Therefore, it is unwise to ask every little detail to your senior friends. Frankly, it will annoy them.

论点:过多依赖高年级同学也不太好

例子:他们的经验来自于自己独特的经历,而且也不一定对学校的一切了如指掌

解释:经验不一定适用于所有人,也不能有时间精力向新生介绍一切

As a solution, orientation programs from official platforms in school can provide all the information you will need in order to “survive”. In essence, there will be volunteers that are willing to answer your questions while guiding you throughout the school. As a newcomer, it is moreimportant to understand the basic facilities and programs that the university provides rather than going into too much detail on specific aspects of the school. When new students stay long enough, they will develop their sense of understanding anyways, so opinions from senior students are not always necessary.

论点:学校组织的新生活动最有用

例子:学校会有志愿者来回答你的问题,向你介绍学校的一切

解释:作为新生,首要任务是对学校的设施和课程的一切有初步了解,而并非对某一方面了解深刻以至于对所有其他的内容一无所知

To sum up, senior peers can provide you with detailed and useful information on certain aspects of the university while introductory programs can quickly get you to know about the school in general. However, the latter is much more useful as it can provide immediate information on facilities and courses that a newcomer anxiously needs. Overall, it is absolutely necessary for newbies to adapt both ways in order to maximize their experience in university. After all, university is the place where it will consume four years of their lives.

总结:向老生求助以及参加新人欢迎活动都行,但是后者对新人来说更有用

延伸话题:学生应该主动去用这两种方式去加深对学校的了解

重点词汇

merit (n.)优点,本文中用于替换“positive sides”

inaccessible (adj.) 达不到的,accessible的反义词

café (n.)餐厅,本文中用于替换canteen,不是“咖啡馆”的意思

unobtainable (adj.) 难以获得的,obtainable的反义词

intensive (adj.)剧烈的,本文中指“高强度的学习”

frank (adj.)坦白地,注意这里不是“Frank”这个人名

latter (n.)后者,注意本词美式读音与ladder一样,不要弄混


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